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Love Letter From The Dead
ReplyDeleteAll I ever needed was you
I shouldn't have cared about what everyone else thought
I shouldn't have cared about myself
But I needed to
Because it felt like nobody was looking out for me
I wanted so hard to believe in us/love
But it seemed too good to be true to even conceive
As you were moving forward in life
As I stagnated in mine
And here I still am
I'm not sure why
I guess that all I ever wanted was someone like you
So when I finally had that
I didn't know what else to do
When you wanted something more
I guess it was only a matter of time
Until I became a chore
And the relationship was going to die
No matter how hard I tried to fight
To keep things alive
I couldn't see past the needle in my eye
I might as well have been blind
Then I ran out of white lies
And you saw through my disguise
As I no longer had anywhere that I could hide
I was so scared of losing you to the night
That I ended up running away
Until you were out of sight
Which I regret to this day
As there is no light
Just a darkness from which nothing seems to exist
But an all emcompassing almost perfect silence
That I'm only fortunate enough to be able to lift
With the memories of our youthful bliss
Which haunt me but I'll always miss
When happiness was such a regular gift
That it may have seemed
To go unnoticed and unappreciated
But I'm still thankful
To have ever met your kiss
Even if it left me so heartbroken and hopeless
This is forever, this is never, this is the end
This is never, this is forever, nowhere to begin
Being sentient, as it is the opposite of infinite
I have been witness to the paradox of consciousness
Oh, what the hey.
ReplyDeleteWe'll allow critique submissions here.
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